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//8/23/2013//
===//I think that people should be able to adopt babys if they want to and i think that it should be made public because if the kid wants to beable to see who there real mother and father is. Why would somebody not know who there real mom are dad was i think that is stupid, unless the mom are dad is in jail are dead are they do drugs are did something bad than i would understand why somebody wouldent want them to see there mom are dad ether but later on in life there going to half to find out because every body has to know if there adopted are not.//=== ===//i dont know anybody who is adopted but i think it would suck to be adopeted because not knowing who your real mom and dad is would just suck and loving two other people who you thought was your mom and dad would hurt somebody maby and than when they die and your all sad your real mom shows up and says there your real mom. Some kids probley would to know all about there real famley and why they gave up on them and what kind of problems that there real famley is in. At one point in there life they will figure out no matter what.//===

8/16/2013 paper or plastic? I wouldent know whitch one to pick because plastic people say that plastic kills the earth and animals when people just let it go around and paper i wouldent really know ether because some people say paper is better than plastic but plastic dosent kill as much trees because with paper bags people half to cut down lots of trees. I think that paper bags cost more than plastic bags too because lots of people use plastic bags but onley some people use paper bags because they just dont like plastic. Plastic bags are easyer to carry things in too because if a paper bag gets wet than the bottom is going to rip and every thing is going too fall out with a plastic bad if it gets wet its not going too fall out. You could probley onley use one paper bag to carry every thing with because there bigger and the plastic bags are smaller and you would half to use more. In some ways paper can be better than plastic because they dont kill as much animals than the plastic bags do.

Your last sentence is the closest to a thesis statement. You have some very good arguments for both sides of the issue, however, you need to make a decision about which one you will support, then give the appropriate supporting details to match it. Then, argue against the opposing view. 10 points= 70 Value ||  Points Earned  ||
 * **SEBHS Essay Rubric (aligned with GHSWT Rubric)** ||
 * || ** 5 **  ||  ** 4 **  ||  ** 3 **  ||  ** 2 **  ||  ** 1 **  ||  Weighted
 * ** IDEAS **
 * ** Controlling idea **
 * ** Supporting ideas **
 * ** Use of details **
 * ** Awareness of purpose **
 * ** Sense of completeness ** ||  ||   || The essay is sufficiently focused and contains some ideas and examples. The response is generally appropriate to the persuasive purpose. || The essay is minimally focused. The provided examples are vague or general and the response demonstrates minimal awareness. || The essay shows little or no focus and the ideas are unclear, irrelevant, or repetitive. The response is incomplete or too brief. ||  X2  || 4 ||
 * ** ORGANIZATION **
 * ** Introduction/body/conclusion **
 * ** Sequence of ideas **
 * ** Grouping of ideas **
 * ** Effective transitions **
 * ** Awareness of purpose ** ||  ||   || The organization is generally appropriate and the ideas are clearly sequenced, but may be repetitive. Transitions are used || The organization is formulaic or inappropriate. The response may lack a clear introduction or conclusion. Transitions are rare. || The essay shows little evidence of organization or sequencing. Transitions are not used. The response is incomplete or too brief. ||  X1  || 2 ||
 * ** STYLE **
 * ** Sentence variety **
 * ** Word choice **
 * ** Audience awareness **
 * ** Personal voice ** ||  ||   || The language and tone are appropriate. Word choice is adequate, but may be simple or ordinary. Some sentence variety is evident. || The language and tone are uneven. Word choice is simple, ordinary, or repetitive. There is minimal variation in sentence length and structure. || The language and tone are inappropriate. Word choice is incorrect or confusing. The response is incomplete or too brief. ||  X1  || 2 ||
 * ** CONVENTIONS **
 * ** Sentence formation **
 * ** Subject-verb agreement **
 * ** Standard word forms **
 * ** Punctuation, spelling, and capitalization ** ||  ||   || The writer demonstrates sufficient control of the conventions of written English. Errors may interfere with meaning, but are not distracting. || The writer demonstrates minimal control of the conventions of written English. Errors are frequent and interfere with meaning. || The writer lacks understanding of the conventions of written English. Errors are pervasive. The response is incomplete or too brief. ||  X1  || 2 ||

8/9/2013 I think school should be a place for debate, I think it should be a place to debate because people would be able to think about what there answer would be better for the students because they would get to deside what there answer would be easyer while they had the choice to here from other people that they would know to. People could debate about what ever they wanted too and if they didnt know what to say are what the answer would be they could ask somebody elts and besides debateing in school takes up working time during class and it could help some stupid kids. Value ||  Points Earned  || Do you realize you have only 2 sentences in this paragraph? It is better to express your point of view in a way that doesn't ramble. At the same time, choosing your words carefully to include some short sentences and some longer sentences would improve your writing. 12 points = 70
 * **SEBHS Essay Rubric (aligned with GHSWT Rubric)** ||
 * || ** 5 **  ||  ** 4 **  ||  ** 3 **  ||  ** 2 **  ||  ** 1 **  ||  Weighted
 * ** IDEAS **
 * ** Controlling idea **
 * ** Supporting ideas **
 * ** Use of details **
 * ** Awareness of purpose **
 * ** Sense of completeness ** ||  ||   || The essay is sufficiently focused and contains some ideas and examples. The response is generally appropriate to the persuasive purpose. Needs more support. ||   ||   ||  X2  || 6 ||
 * ** ORGANIZATION **
 * ** Introduction/body/conclusion **
 * ** Sequence of ideas **
 * ** Grouping of ideas **
 * ** Effective transitions **
 * ** Awareness of purpose ** ||  ||   ||   || The response may lack a clear introduction or conclusion. Transitions are rare. ||   ||  X1  || 2 ||
 * ** STYLE **
 * ** Sentence variety **
 * ** Word choice **
 * ** Audience awareness **
 * ** Personal voice ** ||  ||   ||   || The language and tone are uneven. Word choice is simple, ordinary, or repetitive. There is minimal variation in sentence length and structure. ||   ||  X1  || 2 ||
 * ** CONVENTIONS **
 * ** Sentence formation **
 * ** Subject-verb agreement **
 * ** Standard word forms **
 * ** Punctuation, spelling, and capitalization ** ||  ||   ||   || The writer demonstrates minimal control of the conventions of written English. Errors are frequent and interfere with meaning. ||   ||  X1  || 2 ||

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