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I think that adaption should be public and private because its up to the person are child

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I think that we should have the right to choose if we wont paper or plastic. I think we can have paper or plastic because people say that plastic is bad for the enviroment. I think that plastic harms the turtles

Eleventh grade expectations include writing multiple paragraphs comprised of 6-8 sentences each. This is much too simple for the expectations of this course in 45 minutes. ~ Ms. Oren 5/25 points = 20 Value ||  Points Earned  ||
 * **SEBHS Essay Rubric (aligned with GHSWT Rubric)** ||
 * || ** 5 **  ||  ** 4 **  ||  ** 3 **  ||  ** 2 **  ||  ** 1 **  ||  Weighted
 * ** IDEAS **
 * ** Controlling idea **
 * ** Supporting ideas **
 * ** Use of details **
 * ** Awareness of purpose **
 * ** Sense of completeness ** ||  ||   ||   ||   || The essay shows little or no focus and the ideas are unclear, irrelevant, or repetitive. The response is incomplete or too brief. ||  X2  || 2 ||
 * ** ORGANIZATION **
 * ** Introduction/body/conclusion **
 * ** Sequence of ideas **
 * ** Grouping of ideas **
 * ** Effective transitions **
 * ** Awareness of purpose ** || The organization of ideas supports the writer’s focus. Ideas are grouped in a logical manner. Effective and varied transitions are used. || The organization is appropriate and the sequencing of ideas is logical. Varied transitions are used. || The organization is generally appropriate and the ideas are clearly sequenced, but may be repetitive. Transitions are used || The organization is formulaic or inappropriate. The response may lack a clear introduction or conclusion. Transitions are rare. || The essay shows little evidence of organization or sequencing. Transitions are not used. The response is incomplete or too brief. || X1  || 1 ||
 * ** STYLE **
 * ** Sentence variety **
 * ** Word choice **
 * ** Audience awareness **
 * ** Personal voice ** || The writer utilizes carefully crafted phrases to create a sustained tone and an authoritative voice. Word choice reflects an advanced vocabulary. || The language and tone of the essay enhance the persuasive purpose. Word choice is appropriate. Sentences are varied. || The language and tone are appropriate. Word choice is adequate, but may be simple or ordinary. Some sentence variety is evident. || The language and tone are uneven. Word choice is simple, ordinary, or repetitive. There is minimal variation in sentence length and structure. || The language and tone are inappropriate. Word choice is incorrect or confusing. The response is incomplete or too brief. || X1  || 1 ||
 * ** CONVENTIONS **
 * ** Sentence formation **
 * ** Subject-verb agreement **
 * ** Standard word forms **
 * ** Punctuation, spelling, and capitalization ** || The writer demonstrates full command of the conventions of written English language. No errors are evident. || The writer demonstrates knowledge of the conventions of written English. Errors are minor and do not interfere with meaning. || The writer demonstrates sufficient control of the conventions of written English. Errors may interfere with meaning, but are not distracting. || The writer demonstrates minimal control of the conventions of written English. Errors are frequent and interfere with meaning. || The writer lacks understanding of the conventions of written English. Errors are pervasive. The response is incomplete or too brief. || X1  || 1 ||

Where is your essay on the purpose of school? ~Ms. Oren? Turn in no later than 8/16/13. Value ||  Points Earned  ||
 * **SEBHS Essay Rubric (aligned with GHSWT Rubric)** ||
 * || ** 5 **  ||  ** 4 **  ||  ** 3 **  ||  ** 2 **  ||  ** 1 **  ||  Weighted
 * ** IDEAS **
 * ** Controlling idea **
 * ** Supporting ideas **
 * ** Use of details **
 * ** Awareness of purpose **
 * ** Sense of completeness ** ||  ||   ||   ||   || The essay shows little or no focus and the ideas are unclear, irrelevant, or repetitive. The response is incomplete or too brief. ||  X2  ||   ||
 * ** ORGANIZATION **
 * ** Introduction/body/conclusion **
 * ** Sequence of ideas **
 * ** Grouping of ideas **
 * ** Effective transitions **
 * ** Awareness of purpose ** ||  ||   ||   ||   || The essay shows little evidence of organization or sequencing. Transitions are not used. The response is incomplete or too brief. ||  X1  ||   ||
 * ** STYLE **
 * ** Sentence variety **
 * ** Word choice **
 * ** Audience awareness **
 * ** Personal voice ** ||  ||   ||   ||   || The language and tone are inappropriate. Word choice is incorrect or confusing. The response is incomplete or too brief. ||  X1  ||   ||
 * ** CONVENTIONS **
 * ** Sentence formation **
 * ** Subject-verb agreement **
 * ** Standard word forms **
 * ** Punctuation, spelling, and capitalization ** ||  ||   ||   ||   || The writer lacks understanding of the conventions of written English. Errors are pervasive. The response is incomplete or too brief. ||  X1  ||   ||

8/9/13 creation myth The world came to be when god created adam and eve.I think they were made by dust and sticks. I think god made animals out of the dust and sticks and the the devil made eve eat from a fruit tree and god told them not to and the devil convented eve to eat from the tree.

You have a very brief creation myth here. You say God created Adam and Eve, yet need to show HOW they were created. Your creation myth should also include geography, and culture, dialogue, and sensory details. These details will also add more length to your writing. first attempt grade = 35. Please revise by adding details and resubmit no later than 8/17/13. ~Ms. Oren

I think debates are some what good.

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